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I’m sitting here
In the beautiful field
The sun is shining
My hand is healed.
The beauty of the world
Is distinctly visible
It is amazing
Just like a deep glistening pool.
I pick the petals of the deep red rose
Holding each one
Gently under my soft nose.
The sweet smell
Of love returns
It drifts down from the sky
Under the gaze of the dark nigh.
It lands lightly onto my skin
And drops as gently
As a very small pin.
I’m too scared to touch it
With my acidic hands
I love all this dreaming
Of distant faraway lands.
I carefully grasp the delicate petal
Being cautious with what I do.
I turn it over and see one thing written
That one thing,
Is “I love you”.
©2006-2009 ~kezbez22
:iconkezbez22:

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also called "the gentle rose"

just something different...

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:icondemon-polecat:
Awwww, that's really cute!

But watch out for sacrificing meaning for a rhyme. The 'how it is just one round ball' line comes to mind. But it has the potential to be really sweet!
:iconkezbez22:
hehe thanks, i couldnt get that line to work, so thats all i could come up with
:iconkezbez22:
changed it now, its still not too good, but i prefer that line
:iconseiv15:
very nice, i do like the end.

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if it wasn't you? Who would it be, who would be going through what you are. you are saving someone else from your troubles. for if it were not you then it would be someone else.

Hope ~ Faith ~ Love
:icondemon-polecat:
It's a hard one to rhyme with, but it is much better. :)
:iconseiv15:
my pleasure

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if it wasn't you? Who would it be, who would be going through what you are. you are saving someone else from your troubles. for if it were not you then it would be someone else.

Hope ~ Faith ~ Love
:iconass-soul:
Tis be Pretty :)

--
MYSTIC SPIRAL CONSUMES MY ASS IN A CLOUD OF LEAVES FALLING FROM THE MOONS GRACE... do i fit in here yet? Didn't think so... Olive Juice Too!
:iconimaginarysoldier:
Meh you've got more meaningful posts than mine, you don't need one from me... but it's good.

--
"A fear of weapons is a sign of retarded sexual and emotional maturity"- Sigmund Freud

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